I just dropped my final review essay and I have to say, it was easier to add to the essay. I wrote about the subject of ice fishing and I experienced it, that's what made it easier to write about because I was there. Everyone who looked at my review thought it needed more details .
So I went back into the review and really thought about this. I narrowed down and explained more about the fish house itself and that experience. I tried to use a narrative form, telling a story added to my review and I think kept people interested.
I think I like my draft a lot more now because I gave it a much more interesting lead, but I am not so sure about my ending, I liked it, but don't know if others will. Sure hope some of you try ice fishing in the future, I know I had a great time and will go again.
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